My History Playing Football
Football is a really fun sport that I thought
that I wouldn’t find in Mexico. One
of my favorite parts is when the quarterback says "hut". It is the
best part because you are all ready to start the play.
I really like
football. I started when one of my neighbors asked me if I wanted to play
football. So I asked him, "Is there
a football team near here?" He said,
"like 10 minutes from here." I told my dad and bought my equipment. So I started
training. I began to like it more and
more. Sometimes I got beat up by the other kids because I still didn’t know a
lot about football.
One day I told the coach I wanted to try QB. So
I tried the position. I liked it, and I thought I was pretty good throwing. The
coaches liked me being QB. But I didn’t know the plays so the coaches told me I
could be wide receiver. I liked that position, but I really preferred QB better. Nevertheless, I started training as receiver. I caught
pretty well. Then
I liked playing the line so I decided to be a lineman till they told me I was too small. So then I didn’t
really know what I was going to play.
Then like a month
later and after a lot of training and exercise, I started playing QB again. I was pretty good
but the coaches didn’t know my age. I was playing with the older kids as QB.
The coaches thought it was ok that I played with older kids. Then the head
coach let me decide if I wanted to play with the older guys as substitute QB or
to play with my age as fullback and linebacker. So I decided play with the guys
my age. Then just yesterday, May 27, I
went to our inauguration of our league. There was a lot of people in the football
field, it was fun. I really like it. We walked with a lot of other really good
teams. We appeared on TV, well, a special channel and online. I felt like a star.
Well that’s about it
for my football career I have been playing for about half a year. So I will be
playing as a fullback and linebacker .I really like those positions and I
really want to win the championship. And I will like to play all my life.
Daniel, I like your blog. It's a great idea for practical homeschooling. It's real life too. I guess that's why I said it was "practical." :-)
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I hope I'm not embarrassing you by writing his. I don't mean to. Everyone makes mistakes in their writing. I do all the time, but most of the errors I make by carelessness, not because I didn't know they were errors.
Just thought I'd offer in case you would like some help.
BTW, this post has a few things that could be better or that just need some correction/editing. There aren't too many though. You're writing well for a bilingual student. Good job.
If you'd like some feedback, I would copy your writing/post, put it in an email or Word document with highlights or some way to make notes to point out the corrections. Reading them over should help you eliminate the same errors in the future and thus, help you become a better writer. At least, that's the idea. Let me know if you'd like this. Or have your dad/mom email me. They have my email address.
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